改写练习#20 Surge in Travelling Abroad
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[size=2]Increasing individuals choose to travel abroad in recent ten years.With the graph showing the number of people in city X traveling abroad in 1995,2000,and 2005,we can hardly miss this drastic change around us.
The number of people traveling abroad was only almost 10,000 in 1990;but after five years this data was amounting to near 40,000 and four times as many as that in 1990;by 2005,the number of people was soaring to 125,000 and far beyond the past.
As far as I am concerned,the emergence of this trend involved several reasons.For one thing,with the enhancement of people's living standard and capacity of purchase,the desire they want to travel another region becomes more and more intensive;for another,in some foreign countries,the traveling industry is one of their main economic sources,so they awfully encourage and welcome our fellow citizens to come to their countries.
Of course,when we talk about this tide,at the same time,more attention should be poured into the consequent impact.Duing to most of travels that happen in the weekend and vacation,our state has to impose more measures and approaches on transportion and security,it doubtlessly brings more pressures.[/size]
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[size=3][color=Blue]The last decade has witnessed a surge in Chinese travelling abroad. The graph showing the statistics of the number of people from City X travelling abroad in 1995, 2000 and 2006 confirms what we can hardly fail to notice happening around us.
Starting from a modest 10,000 in 1990, the number has quadrupled to 40,000 by 1995. By 2005, it has reached a whopping 125,000: more than ten fold from a decade ago.
With the standard of living and purchasing power having risen considerably for many city folks, it stands to reason that the urge to travel to unknown and exotic places has burgeoned. Countries heavily depended on their tourist industries as an important component of their economies are always on the prowl to attract more visitors with alluring advertisements and attractive touring packages, and China, being an emerging economic power, is naturally a target for their advertisement blitz.
With most travelling taking place on weekends and vacations, our government should bring in regulations to alleviate the problem of transportation bottlenecks, as well as to increase the safety and security for travellers. These added measures, however, might bring extra pressures to the tourist industry as well as the travelling public.[/color][/size]
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