昨天帮人翻译了个留学文件，请大家帮忙修正
[i=s] 本帖最后由 小钰钰 于 2012-3-7 09:02 编辑 [/i]朋友家的小孩想留学，让我帮忙翻译，自我感觉翻译的很糟糕，请大家帮忙，好多词汇感觉翻译的不准确。
Admissions
Applying to the University is the first step
In order for you to participate in our programs you must apply to the University and be
accepted. So your first step is to go to the Student Services web-site section on prospective
students and find out about admission to SFU. When you've finished looking over the
admission requirements then you can hit the "Think You're Ready" button to apply to the
University.
Remember the deadlines are about 4 months prior to the start of the semester you would
like to apply for. You must apply by April 30th for September admission and by September
30th for January admission. Most of our programs start in September.
College Transfer
The best way to find out what your BC College courses transfer in as is to go to the B.C.
Transfer Guide. Please note that most FPA credit does not transfer directly to a course, but
something that looks like "FPA 1THRSTU (3)" which means in this case that it is 3 credits of
lower division theater studio courses.
If you are applying from a college, or plan to go to a college first, it is a good idea to make
sure you have taken care of at least some of your Writing, Quantitative and Breadth
Requirements before coming to SFU.
Audition/Interview/Portfolio
Most of our majors have an audition/interview process before entry. Some happen in the
spring before first year starts, but most happen 2nd or 3rd year. Below is some information,
but it is really important that you click on the button above for your area of interest so we
can send you information to guide you to the next step of application.
Art & Culture: Start with FPA 111 and when you finish FPA 210 with a B or better we can
declare your major.
Dance: Auditions for Fall semester entry to first year are in April and a second set in
August. Always best to attend the first audition. If you are out of town there is the option to
audition by video.
Film: Film has a questionnaire and interview process for entry into first year due on March
9th for Fall 2012.
Music: FPA 104 is open to all and is the logical starting point. If you feel you can read and
write musical notation, contact our office for a waiver from this class.
Theatre Performance: Auditions are held in April and August to join the 2nd year
ensemble in the Fall semester. FPA 150 is the course you would sign up for in first year.
Theatre Production and Design: FPA 170 and 171 are the starting point for Production
and Design and students will enter the major or extended minor after second year.
Visual Art: There is no portfolio for first year Visual Art. FPA 160 is the starting point. The
major is declared after FPA 261 is complete for entry into third year. There is an interview
for the Extended Minor for entry into second year.
For more information please contact our office at 778 -782-3363 or e-mail us.
以下是我翻译的
[p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]入学[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]申请学校是第一步[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]为了参加我们的课程您必须申请我们的学校并被录取。第一步是去学生服务网站招生部分，找出[/font][font=Times New Roman]SFU[/font][font=宋体]的准入。当你阅读完我们的准入标准并认为您达到我们要求请点击“我准备好”按钮申请学校。[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]请记得报名截止日期是你想要申请课程学期开始前[/font][font=Times New Roman]4[/font][font=宋体]个月。你必须在的四月三十日之前为九月的开学，九月三十为一月的开学做好申请。大部分的课程在九月份开始。[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]转学[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]找出您[/font][font=Times New Roman]BC[/font][font=宋体]大学课程转学要求的最好办法是找到网站的转学指南[/font][font=Times New Roman] [/font][font=宋体]。请注意大部分的[/font][font=Times New Roman]FPA [/font][font=宋体]学分不能直接转换。但是有些类似[/font][font=Times New Roman]"FPA 1THRSTU (3)"[/font][font=宋体]这的意思是戏曲电影专业低于其他专业三个学分。[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]如果你正在申请大学或者打算去大学，请确保在您来[/font][font=Times New Roman]SFU[/font][font=宋体]之前保存好您的一些作品，一定数量和广度的资质证明。[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]面试[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]大部分的专业有一个面试，有一些是在第一学年开始前的春天。但是大部分在第二年或者第三年。下面是一些信息，但是点击上面的按钮“你的关注”是非常重要的，这样我们就可以给您发送信息指导您下一步的申请。[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]艺术文化[/font][font=Times New Roman] [/font][font=宋体]开始于[/font][font=Times New Roman]FPA111[/font][font=宋体]当你完成[/font][font=Times New Roman]FPA 210 [/font][font=宋体]并完成[/font][font=Times New Roman]B[/font][font=宋体]或以上我们可以[/font][font=Times New Roman] [/font][font=宋体]你的专业[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]舞蹈[/font][font=Times New Roman] [/font][font=宋体]秋季学期的面试在在第一年的四月，第二次是在八月。最好参加第一轮面试。如果您不在城镇可以选择录音面试。[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]电影[/font][font=Times New Roman] [/font][font=宋体]影视专业有一个调查表以及一个入学面试流程，报名截止日期为[/font][font=Times New Roman]2012[/font][font=宋体]年三月九日。[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]音乐[/font][font=Times New Roman] FDA104[/font][font=宋体]对所有开放，这就是理论的起始分。如果您感觉您可以阅读并且写音符，联系我们办公室取消这一课程。[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]戏剧表演[/font][font=Times New Roman] [/font][font=宋体]面试在四月和八月在秋季学期入学后第二学年的联合汇演。[/font][font=Times New Roman]FPA150[/font][font=宋体]是这门学科您在第一年必须完成的。[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]戏剧导演和编剧[/font][font=Times New Roman] FPA170HE 171[/font][font=宋体]是这们学科的起始分或者是第二学年后的选修。[/font][/p][p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]视觉艺术[/font][font=Times New Roman] [/font][font=宋体]视觉艺术第一年没有面试。[/font][font=Times New Roman]FPA160[/font][font=宋体]是此专业起始分。第三学期开始前[/font][font=Times New Roman]FPA[/font][font=宋体]需要达到[/font][font=Times New Roman]261.[/font][font=宋体]第二学年开始前有一个选修面试。[/font][/p]
[p=30, 2, left][font=宋体]更多信息请联系 或者发邮件给我们。[/font][/p] 谁帮我看看呀。 [i=s] 本帖最后由 雨落风残 于 2012-3-7 16:16 编辑 [/i]
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我就针对你的翻译，觉得翻译的对的地方我就不说了，就说说我觉得可能应该修改的地方吧。
When you've finished looking over the admission requirements then you can hit the "Think You're Ready" button to apply to the University.
当你阅读完我们的准入标准并认为您达到我们要求请点击“我准备好”按钮申请学校。
上面是你的翻译，我觉得When you've finished looking over the admission requirements ，这个从句，只表达了“当你看完我们的招生标准”并没有表达别的意思，我想问你一下，你的“并认为您达到我们的要求”是从哪里翻译出来的？Think You are Ready是主句中按钮的定语，只要在那里表达出来就可以了。
Remember the deadlines are about 4 months prior to the start of the semester you would
like to apply for.[color=red] You must apply by April 30th for September admission and by September
30th for January admission.[/color] Most of our programs start in September.
请记得报名截止日期是你想要申请课程学期开始前4个月。你必须在的四月三十日之前为九月的开学，九月三十为一月的开学做好申请。大部分的课程在九月份开始。
红色部分你翻译的有些死板了，语序不符合中文的说话习惯。虽然意思是那个意思。应该这么说：如果你想申请9月份的入学，就必须在4月30号前提交申请。后面那句同理。
If you are applying from a college, or plan to go to a college first, it is a good idea to make
sure you have taken care of at least some of your Writing, Quantitative and Breadth
Requirements before coming to SFU.
这里请注意，原文中说的是 applying from a college,而不是说，applying for a college,你懂我的意思吧？还有下一句， 我觉得应该翻译成，确保在来SFU(这个是那个大学名称的缩写吗？）之前，已经了解对你写作，数量以及广度方面的要求。
Audition/Interview/Portfolio
还有这三个，我不知道你为什么只翻译出了一个“面试”，其实这3个概念还不是完全相同的。
Most of our majors have an audition/interview process before entry.请注意，这里有一个before entry,就是说是在开学之前进行的，你没有把时间翻译出来。
这句“but it is really important that you click on the button above for your area of interest”
area of your interest应该翻译成“你感兴趣的领域”。
Art & Culture: Start with FPA 111 and when you finish FPA 210 with a B or better we can
declare your major.
还有这句话你翻译的太拘泥于原文了，翻译出来的东西要考虑中文读者的习惯。应该翻译成，首先进行的是FPA 111的学习（或考核），当你以B或以上的成绩结束FPA210的学习后，我们就可以确定你的专业了。
注意这个，If you are out of town there is the option to audition by video.
video是视频的意思，可不是录音面试，而是说把试音的过程录制成视频寄给他们。
还有这句问题比较大些，Film has a questionnaire and interview process for entry into first year due on March 9th for Fall 2012.
由于原文前面提到了，想申请某个学期的课程，必须在这个学期开始的半年之前提出申请，而这句话也是表达的这个意思，他是说，如果想申请2012年秋季的课程，就必须在3月9日前回答调查问卷和进行面试过程。我想你自己应该明白这个时间概念，但翻译更重要的是准确的表达出来，更重要的是让看的人明白。
接下来几段我意见和你的出入比较大，我就按我的理解翻译一下吧。
Theatre Performance: Auditions are held in April and August to join the 2nd year
ensemble in the Fall semester. FPA 150 is the course you would sign up for in first year.
戏剧表演：在四月和八月要进行试镜，做为第二学年秋季学期联合演出的准备。
在第一学年，你将要学FPA 150这门课程。
Theatre Production and Design: FPA 170 and 171 are the starting point for Production
and Design and students will enter the major or extended minor after second year.
由于电影中的制片人都翻译成“producer”，我觉得这里的Theatre Production应该翻译成“舞台设计或戏剧制作”。对于你这句的翻译，前半段我基本认同，但后半段异议就比较大，后半句应该翻译成，学生在第二学年后，才会确定专业或者增加选修课程。
Visual Art: There is no portfolio for first year Visual Art. FPA 160 is the starting point. The
major is declared after FPA 261 is complete for entry into third year. There is an interview
for the Extended Minor for entry into second year.
这里你没有把 The major is declared 翻译出来
For more information please contact our office at 778 -782-3363 or e-mail us.
如果想了解更多的信息，请拨打我们的办公室电话 778-782-3363或者发电子邮件联系我们。[/color] 还有这句话The best way to find out what your BC College courses [color=Red]transfer in as [/color]is to go to the B.C. Transfer Guide.我没看明白，特别是红色的部分，哪位来指点一下。 [i=s] 本帖最后由 小钰钰 于 2012-3-8 14:52 编辑 [/i]
:qq50]非常感激，以后要多跟版主学习。
Think You're Ready 这个地方我没理解好，确实多了。 taken care of 这个地方为什么是了解呢？不是保存的意思。因为我知道国外好多大学是要这些东西的。 面试那块我是晕的，我不清楚三个的区别，我开始翻译了时间，但是看到后来的说是第二年第三年。这样跟之前的开学前不是矛盾的么 [i=s] 本帖最后由 小钰钰 于 2012-3-8 14:47 编辑 [/i]
FPA 111 这个是什么东东呢？其实所有的FPA加个数字我都不是太理解。是不是指的某门课程，但是他们用了编号？ Theatre Performance: Auditions are held in April and August to join the 2nd year
ensemble in the Fall semester.
戏剧表演：在四月和八月要进行试镜，做为第二学年秋季学期联合演出的准备。
这一句 为什么什么做准备是在哪里体现的呢？ Transfer Guide 是指的转学指南么 [quote]taken care of 这个地方为什么是了解呢？不是保存的意思。因为我知道国外好多大学是要这些东西的。 ...
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如果是保存，那后面的requirement怎么解释呢？ [quote]面试那块我是晕的，我不清楚三个的区别，我开始翻译了时间，但是看到后来的说是第二年第三年。这样跟之前的 ...
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[color=red]Some[/color] happen in the
spring before first year starts, [color=red]but most[/color] happen 2nd or 3rd year.
这句话你注意2个红色的部分就明白了。 [quote]FPA 111 这个是什么东东呢？其实所有的FPA加个数字我都不是太理解。是不是指的某门课程，但是他们用了编号 ...
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这个我不知道他们的课程设置，单从这里看，应该是同一门课程从浅入深的不同阶段吧。 [quote]Theatre Performance: Auditions are held in April and August to join the 2nd year
ensemble in the Fal ...
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这里主要是从to join看出来的，3月和8月的排练是为了后面的巡演做准备。 Audition/Interview/Portfolio
这三个词怎么翻呢？ [quote]Some happen in the
spring before first year starts, but most happen 2nd or 3rd year.
这句话你 ...
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这个句子加上时间，不就成了这样“[font=宋体][size=10.5pt][color=#000000]大部分的专业在开学之前有一个面试，有一些是在第一学年开始前的春天。但是大部分在第二年或者第三年。"不前后矛盾啊，入学前，为什么又是第二年第三年，那不是入学后了啊。[/color][/size][/font] [quote]这个句子加上时间，不就成了这样“大部分的专业在开学之前有一个面试，有一些是在第一学年开始前的 ...
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我把这句话省略的部分补充全了，你再看看。Most of our majors have an audition/interview process before entry. Some happen in the spring before first year starts, but most happen (before) 2nd (year starts) or ( before) 3rd year (starts).
我觉得只能这么理解。 [quote]Audition/Interview/Portfolio
这三个词怎么翻呢？
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这是个艺术类的招生，所以Audition翻译成试音，试听或试镜。
portfolio
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（参赛或应聘用的）画作选辑，代表作品集 A portfolio is a set of pictures by someone, or photographs of examples of their work, which they use when entering competitions or applying for work. [list][*]
After dinner that evening, Edith showed them a portfolio of her own political cartoons.
那天吃过晚饭，伊迪丝向他们展示了她的一组政治漫画作品。[/list] 这下都明白了。:qq88]感谢感谢。
我又给翻译了一段
[i=s] 本帖最后由 小钰钰 于 2012-3-9 13:59 编辑 [/i]English language requirementAll applicants, regardless of country of origin or citizenship status, must demonstrate competence inthe English language in one of the following six ways, depending on where you are completing youreducation. (Note that enrollment in first-year writing intensive courses requires higher grades thanadmission grades. See our FAQs.)1. completion of the last three years of full-time secondary education in English in Canada or another country where the principal language of instruction is English. A minimum blended grade of 60% or C in one of English 12, English Literature 12, or English 12 First Peoples, or their equivalents, is required.
Note: a final, blended mark of 75% will permit enrollment in a writing-intensive (W) course.
2. completion of the last four years of full-time secondary education in English at a recognizedInternational school where the principal language of instruction in the country is not English. Aminimum grade of C or 60% in senior level English is required.
3. completion of IB English A 1 or A2 (HL or SL) with a minimum grade of 3.
4. completion of a three unit transferable English course or certified W (writing intensive) coursewith a minimum grade of C-.
5. completion of the IELTS (International English Language Testing System) with a minimumoverall band score of 6.0.
(Effective for Summer 2012 admission and later: completion of the IELTS (InternationalEnglish Language Testing System) with a minimum overall band score of 6.5 with no part lessthan 6.0.)6. completion of TOEFL IBT (Test of English as a Foreign Language internet-based test) with anoverall score of 88 or better with a minimum score of 20 in each of the four components(listening, speaking, writing, reading).
For more information on the literacy requirements visit New Admission Standards.
英语语言要求
任何申请人，无论国籍身份，必须必须通过以下下六种方式表现出自己的英语语言能力，这依赖于你在什么地方完成你的教育。（请注意参加第一年的写作课程需要入门以上级别）
1. 在加拿大或者其它主要用英语授课的国家完成至少三年以上的全日制中等教育。A minimum blended grade of 60% or C in one of English 12, English Literature 12, or English 12 First Peoples, or their equivalents, is required.
注：最后
2 在主要的教学语言不是英语的国家里的被认可的国际学校，完成至少四年的全日制中等教育。至少达到C等或高级英语中 60%。
3 完成 IB 英语 A1 或 A2 (HL 或 SL)至少为三级。
4 完成三个单元的英语翻译课程或者写作课程至少达到C级。
5.完成雅思 （国际英语语言测试系统） 总分最低达到 6.0分 。(适用于2012 夏季入学以及之后： 雅思 （国际英语语言测试系统） 最低总分 6.5分 并且任何部分都不能低于6.0分。）
6.完成托福 IBT （英语作为外语以互联网为依托的测试），最低总分 88，四个部分 （听、 说、 写、 读），每项最低20分。
更多关于语言要求的信息请访问 [quote]English language requirementAll applicants, regardless of country of origin or citizenship status, m ...
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你翻译的比较凌乱啊，你自己再仔细看看，应该能翻译更好的。in one of the six ways 是六种方式之一，按你的翻译，就是要六种方式每种都要试一遍了，意思可差的多了。还有demostrate是证明的意思，不是表现。你自己再重新看一遍，我吃饭去了，不明白的地方我再给你提点意见。 好的 这依赖于你在什么地方完成你的教育。这个地方我感觉也翻译的很奇怪
还有第一段 不太明白啥意思啊[p=30, 2, left][font=Times New Roman][color=#000000]1.
[/color][color=#000000]A minimum blended
grade of 60% or C in one of English 12, English Literature 12, or English 12 First Peoples, or their equivalents, is required. [/color][/font][/p] [i=s] 本帖最后由 小钰钰 于 2012-3-11 08:50 编辑 [/i]
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这三个怎么措辞呢。 [quote]这依赖于你在什么地方完成你的教育。这个地方我感觉也翻译的很奇怪
还有第一段 不太明白啥意思啊1.
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翻译成：这取决于你在哪完成的教育比较好，这很正常，不同地区的教育有不同的特色和要求，就比如山东省高考的分数比全国大多数地区都要高一样。
blended 就是综合的，后面的那些我想应该是课程的名称吧，equivalent就是同等的，对等的，这里讲的时候分数要达到一个什么样的水平。 replacement就是更新，替换的意思，Library Card, 图书卡，Identification Card 身份证明， Official Transcript 官方的成绩单。 有啥问题请教我就行，明明有高手，不问，吼吼。 这种东东，看个大概就行，没必要抠字眼。
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