小学三年级的作文，请帮忙批改。 monkey, family, telephone, yellow, father

快速之星

ME
My name is ye qi, I’m nine. I have tall body, two big eyes, two small ears and a small mouth. I like bananas, yellow, monkey. I am a happy boy.
  I have a big bedroom. bedroom have a telephone It grey, two desk It a brown a yellow, and two chair It black.
  I have big family. My grandfather is funny and heavy. He has old face. He love apple. My grandmother is kindly old lady. She has big body. She love grape. My father is tall and strong. He has a big month. He loves pineapple. My mother is pretty. She has thin body. She likes peach.
  My teacher is tall and thin. She has thin body. She To teach we English. My friend is cute and naughty. He has two small eyes and two big ears. He likes mango.
  The pet is a handsome cat is me. It has big body and a long tail. It likes fish and mice.
  I love family.

kobe

量词好像经常都少了  例如：I have big family.（少了a）

icefire

小学生认识这么多单词哦

簿子酒

initiative

簿子酒

creative
multi

陈秀玲

My name is ye qi, I’m nine. I have tall body, two big eyes, two small ears and a small mouth. I like bananas, yellow, monkey. I am a happy boy.
   I have a big bedroom. bedroom has a telephone , two desks, one is brown and another is yellow, and two black chairs .
   I have a big family. My grandfather is funny and heavy. He has an old face. He loves apple. My grandmother is a kindly old lady. She has big body. She loves grape. My father is tall and strong. He has a big month. He loves pineapple. My mother is pretty. She has thin body. She likes peach.
   My teacher is tall and thin. She has thin body. She teaches us English. My friend is cute and naughty. He has two small eyes and two big ears. He likes mango.
   I have a pet. It is a handsome cat. It has a big body and a long tail. It likes fish and mice.
   I love my family.

陈秀玲

很不错，三年级的学生能写出这样的英文。继续加油

cdzj

My name is ye qi, I’m nine. I have tall body, two big eyes, two small ears and a small mouth. I like bananas, yellow, monkey. I am a happy boy.
  I have a big bedroom. bedroom have a telephone It grey, two desk It a brown a yellow, and two chair It black.  I have big family. My grandfather is funny and heavy. He has old face. He love apple. My grandmother is kindly old lady. She has big body. She love grape. My father is tall and strong. He has a big month. He loves pineapple. My mother is pretty. She has thin body. She likes peach.
  My teacher is tall and thin. She has thin body. She To teach we English. My friend is cute and naughty. He has two small eyes and two big ears. He likes mango.
The pet is a handsome cat is me. It has big body and a long tail. It likes fish and mice.
  I love family.

红色部分句子需要调整一下，其他还不错。