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leenyao

请高手帮帮看看有什么不妥，give me some suggestion,thank you.


该不该搁下重重的壳
寻找到底哪里有蓝天
随着轻轻的风轻轻的飘
历经的伤都不感觉疼
我要一步一步往上爬
等待阳光静静看着它的脸
小小的天有大大的梦想
重重的壳挂着轻轻的仰望
我要一步一步往上爬
在最高点乘着叶片往前飞
让风吹干流过的泪和汗
总有一天我有属于我的天

whether should the shell be given up or not,
to searching for my bule sky
flying with the spring breeze
i never feel them as pains as they're
i wanna step one and then another

i'll wait for the sun to be in my sight
there's a wonderful landscape in my heart
i look forward to it under my shell
i wanna climb one and then another
drive the leaf ahead on the top
let sweats and tears fade in breeze
i believe there comes my dream one day.

KeepUp

you are great

yuanchunrong

Both are very good!

凉茶

回复 5# leenyao


    我自己都是毛病一大堆哦~~

leenyao

回复 3# 凉茶


    how familiar it is.

leenyao

回复 2# 凉茶


    thanks，如果能帮我跳出毛病更好啦

凉茶

Whether should I lay down the heavy shell  
To see where I can find the blue sky
Let me go with the wind and the wind is so light  
The anguish I will totally forget it
I will climb up step by step  

Waiting the sun and look at its face  
I have a dream just under the small sky  
I hide my wish in my heavy little shell
I will climb up step by step  
Fly on the leave from the very top point  
Let the wind dry the sweats and tears
Blieve me one day I will have my own sky!

凉茶

回复 1# leenyao


    蛮好的啊~